by Greg » Sat Aug 15, 2009 2:14 am
Tableau and the Red Sunflower
Page One
Panel One: We open up with a wide panel to a young black man in his early 20s, bonded on a wooden log, his hands tied behind his back. His name is Jeremy Tableau. He is good looking and is wearing a white jacket and suit, black tie. His clothes is ruffed, his shirt half way unbuttoned and tie loose, sweat pouring down his face. The tone of the area is very dark and moody, the place reflecting an underground dungeon of sorts.
Caption: Oh, the things I get myself into…
Jeless (off-panel): Jeremy Tableau…
Panel Two: Now a wide panel of a beautiful woman in a red dress. This is Jeless, our antagonist. Her hair is raven black and long, placed softly over her shoulders, her lips full and red to match her ruby colored dress. She has a devilishly attractive smile on her face as she’s holding onto a red sunflower-shaped crystal about two feet long in her hands. Behind her are two large men, pecs and biceps wide and threatening in contrast to their evil looking leers at our hero.
Jeless: Your reputation certainly precedes you. I have to say it’s an honor to have someone like you… breaking into my very own home.
Panel Three: A close-up on Jeremy’s face, head slightly tiled down, his eyes staring towards us.
Caption: The broad with the ruby-colored lips that match her blood colored dress is Jeless. Under different circumstances, I’d be hot for her…
Caption: The antique in her hands is the Red Sunflower. It’s a very special… magic antique. It’s said that one pedal could give a man… or woman… immortality… well, invulnerable at least for a decade - including a halt of the disease called age.
Panel Four: Back to Jeless, a close-up with a smile on her face.
Caption: And she’s a succubus. Which explains why I shouldn’t get hot for her.
Page Two
Panel One/Two: Both these panels will be side-by-side with their dialogue balloons going back and forth with each other in their respected panels. In the first panel is Jeless, her arms crossed, antique still in hand. Her calm composure still in play. We also see a small fly, a termite, flying around the panel. In the second panel is Jeremy who’s calm and collected, a slight smirk on his face, though sweat is still falling.
Jeless: I’m pretty sure a boy… man… of your nature surely knows what I’m capable of. So the fact that you’d risk your neck to steal this from me… Well, I must ask: Why risk it?
Jeremy: Firstly, major thanks for the good props. Hearing my rep cause your panties to flutter sure gets me flattered. And second: I was sent to steal it.
Jeless: Really now? And may I kindly ask for who? I have many enemies.
Jeremy: And I must kindly say sorry, it’s kindly very confidential.
Caption: Lebeur, is that you?!
Jeless: You know my reputation and power. While you may slightly resemble your deliciously mouth watering father, I let no other man defy me. You are not your father and I treat you no different than a common thug.
Jeless 2: So once again: who sent you?
Panel Three: A shot back to Jeremy, smiling.
Jeremy: I’m pretty sure you wouldn’t be able to handle me, you gilf.
Jeless (off-panel): A wild tongue…
Panel Four: We’re now looking at Jeremy’s tied hands, the termite now eating through the ropes. A small panel.
Caption: Yes, Lebeur, I knew you’d come through.
Panel Five: Back to Jeless, licking her revealing sharp teeth. I think this should be a small panel just focusing on her lips.
Jeless: I like that.
Page Three
Panel One: Another side panel of the two, this time Jeless has planted a huge and passionate kiss onto Jeremy, her arms wrapped around his head.
Caption: Damn.
Panel Two: Same shot, only now Jeless is looking at him, her arms around his neck.
Jeless: Boys, go to business with him. But not too much. Leave him in one piece. I plan to **** the answers out of him.
Caption: Hot damn.
Jeremy: I aim to please.
Panel Three: Small panel of the rope around Jeremy’s hands now completely bitten through.
Caption: Good. She’s gone and the ropes are eaten through.
Panel Four: Jeless’ henchmen, teeth sharp and face completely ugly and monstrous as they’re walking towards us.
Jeremy (off-panel): I’ll handle these two, Lebeur…
Panel Five: A two-shot of Jeremy and Lebuer. Show a metamorphosis of the termite transforming into a cheetah. Jeremy has his tie handing down from his right hand.
Jeremy: … You sniff out Jeless and get the crystal.
Page Four
Panel One: A wide panel shot of the two monsters attacking towards our heroes. The tie in Jeremy’s hand has turned into a bat as he’s swung it into one of the monster’s nose, busting it open as a huge gush of blood is splashing out. The other monster has his arms folded from missing a speeding Lebuer who’s aimed for the door.
Panel Two: A panel of Lebeur leaping at Jeless, crystal still in her hand.
Panel Three: Back to Jeremy as he’s used his tie to decapitate the other monster as the previous one is knocked out on the floor.
Panel Four: A shot now of Jeremy fixing up his tie back around his neck as the two monsters are defeated and on the ground.
Panel Five: Wide-panel behind Jeless as she’s standing on her balcony watching Jeremy from a distance being flown away by Lebeur who’s now a pterodactyl in a clear beautiful night. The moon is huge and full with the stars shining bright. From the back of Jeless, we could see that’s she been attacked brutally by Lebeur, bruises and blood covering her.
Jeless: Hmm…
Caption: “Here you go…”
Page Five
Panels One/Two: Side-by-side, balloons going back and forth respectively to the characters. Panel One is of Jeremy’s client, Lord Jonesy, who’s holding up the Red Sunflower and looking at it with a smile of amazement. He’s sitting down in a huge, luxurious chair inside of a beautifully grand luxurious house filled with expensive décor and portraits among other riches. Panel Two is of Jeremy sitting down on the chair opposite to Lord Jonesy, Lebeur now a crow on his shoulder.
Jeremy: The Red Sunflower.
Lord Jonesy: The Red Sunflower.
Jeremy: It was a bitch to get it.
Jonesy: Oh, I’ve no doubt about it. The Red Sunflower. Legend has it that you heat up one crystal pedal for a whole decade of immortality.
Jeremy: Which I never understood. Why not eat the whole damn flower?
Jonesy: That’s just greedy, my dear boy. But a common question. You see, more than one pedal a decade leads to the brink of insanity with a risk of meeting Sir Charon in his ferryboat. As to my end of the bargain…
Jeremy: Yeah, and no pussyfooting either.
Jonesy: A promise is a promise…
Panel Three: Wide panel shot behind Jeremy and Lebeur as a double door is opened up to them by Jonesy as he’s pointing them inside, a room filled with beautiful women, some half naked, some completely, all awaiting. Jonesy has a smile on his face.
Jonesy: One night with my twelve daughters.
Panel Four: Wide-shot resembling the very first panel of the story, Jeremy having a sly smile on his face.
Caption: Oh, the things I get myself into…
Last edited by
Greg on Sat Aug 15, 2009 2:34 am, edited 1 time in total.

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