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Oh Snap??? do you write your own stuff?
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Okay, so no to the alien invasion but yes to the Nazi werewolves?
Seriously, I'm just trying to sort things out here and figure out where your comic is going.
nietoperz wrote:COOPCAP, I think perhaps that rather than square up to everyone and try to fight when faced with criticism and/or ribbing, it may be wisest just to let the moment pass and wait for people to read your work.
MrBlack wrote:You posted the same thread three times. I personally merged two of the threads and deleted the third (which had no posts).
You are welcome to post your art, and thank you for sharing this with us. Just please try not to spam the board.
I'll entertain the motion. If I get a second, we'll have an open poll on the subject.
Jude Terror wrote:I did read this today. I have some good stuff to say about it. Hopefully will have time in a little bit.
Jude Terror wrote:
Nobody else wants to see this?
Doesn't "indie creator" mean independent creator? Using established characters (that are the property of someone else) to create a story of your own is called "fanboy creators", right?
Jude Terror wrote:Ok, so honestly, I was expecting a train wreck from this, based half on the fact that it's fan fiction, and half on CAPCOOP's spectacular entrance to the forums. No offense meant - but you really hit the ground running.
I was pleasantly surprised that I found it entertaining. For a story that spans 50 years or more of history and attempts to rewrite a lot of history and reconcile it with various legends and conspiracy theories, it's remarkably coherent. It flows nicely, it's paced well, and it's downright fun to read. Like a non-pretentious Hickman's S.H.I.E.L.D.. The story has a lot of potential and I would love to see it improved upon, and I would definitely read more of it.
If you're interested in some crits, here are a few things that hold it back or could be made better:[Reveal] Spoiler: Click to ExpandIt needs a letterer/real lettering. It's actually a relatively easy process in Illustrator or even Photoshop, and it would automatically add a level of professionalism to the production. The art itself is really good in places, though it could use some polish in others. I particularly liked the pages that blend newspapers into the backgrounds. Polish all around on this will take it up a notch.
It's fan fiction... but it doesn't need to be. Honestly, I think this story could work without starring Captain America and Nick Fury. Replace them with similar but original characters, and it would work just as well. This is a testament to the writing actually, because all you need to know of the story is laid out in the pages. You don't really need it to be set in the Marvel Universe to work. It would add legitimacy to it, because people just don't take fan fiction seriously.
The biggest issue - PRESENTATION!!! It's really clunky to read it in the format it's in, with images pasted in a blog where you need to click each one to read it. Get this presented in a slideshow type fashion and you'll have a much better chance of people reading past the first few pages - it's just annoying to click, read, click back, scroll, click, read, repeat.
I hope you'll take my crits in the helpful manner in which they're intended, because I was honestly impressed to find that there's some real potential with your story. I think, if you just called the comic Ground Zero, replaced the main characters with derivative characters of your own design, touched it up a bit, and presented it in a webcomic view type of format, you could easily market this as an ongoing webcomic and get some readers.
dairydead wrote:I like how the guy looking to promote his own work is doing most of his posting insulting others. Thanks for that, buddy! But otherwise, after a readthrough, i agree with Jude almost completely. I'm always interested in other artist's work, and i always try to support other artist, but you seem like a huge prick.
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