Greg wrote:That'd be so awesome, Jon! What else would you like me to fix up?
I think the Light Bearer thing should go. It's too comic bookey.
Isaiah should just be a badass with no pretentions of destiny. At least not at first. He's basically an addict who justifies what he's doing because he's doing some good.
I'm also wondering about the son. I like it cause it's shocking, but it seems a little too big of a development for an intro/short story. What if we just made it into his apprentice? I think there would still be a similar effect, but we can save a father/son dynamic for a bigger story.